Introductory email

Dear Professor Blackstone

My name is Qian Hui and you can call me Jo.

I graduated from Ngee Ann Polytechnic (NP) with a diploma in logistics management in 2014 before enrolling into Singapore Institute of Technology (SIT) for my hospitality business degree presently. During my three years at NP, I learnt about various challenges that the logistics and supply chain industry faced daily. Upon graduation, I took a gap year and worked as an administrative officer in an advertising firm. I took charge of quotations, liaised with suppliers and assisted my manager with invoicing.

Last year, I had the opportunity to explore housekeeping at Fairmont as a room attendant for a trimester. Prior to my internship, I had never worked in a hotel before. Although it is very physically demanding and not the most glamourous job, I think the industry attachment served as a stepping stone for me to learn about the overview of the department. Receiving written notes of appreciation from guests made my efforts and hard work worthwhile!

Some of my strengths when it comes to communication include being an active listener, able to make sufficient eye contact with my audience and speak in a friendly tone.  I am open-minded and respect others perspectives even when they do not align with my point of views.

However,  I tend to speak quite softly during formal presentations, hence, I need to work harder to overcome my nervousness. In terms of written communication, I am skilful in expressing my thoughts clearly but I am inclined to use slangs in my assignments. This is why I always spend longer time than my classmates when proofreading our work.

Thank you for taking the time to read this email.

Have a nice day.

Warm regards

Jo

 

Revised 9th February 2017

Read blogs by Adora, Amirul, Chantel, Guo Zhong, Karine, Kieman, Russell, Simin

Commented on blogs by Amirul, Chantel, Guo Zhong, Kieman, Russell, Simin

 

Advertisements

15 thoughts on “Introductory email

  1. Dear Jo,

    This post gives me a good idea of your educational and professional experience as it was concise and rather informative. I am sure interning as housekeeping attendant at Ritz Carlton was not easy but yet a fulfilling experience for you.

    It was a great pleasure reading your introduction!

    Best regards,
    Karine Han

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Dear Karine
      My sincerest apologies for the delayed response. Thank you for taking the time to read my post. Just a correction to take note, I will love to work at Ritz Carlton too but my intern experience was actually at Fairmont 🙂 !

      Have a nice day!
      Jo

      Like

  2. Dear Jo,

    It’s lovely to know that your time at Fairmont Hotel has left you with a sense of achievement and gratification. I am sure we are all looking to improve in terms of communication, be it written or verbal, but I believe that grammar has to be one of the things we should all look to master. With that being said, I cannot wait to read your upcoming blog entries.

    Amirul

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Dear Amirul
      Please excuse my late response. Thank you for taking the time to read my post! I hope by the end of the trimester we are able to hone better communication skills.

      Regards
      Jo

      Like

  3. Dear Qian Hui,

    I have enjoyed reading your post and realised similarity in our logistics background. Certainly, the industrial attachment last year had been an eye opening experience to the hospitality industry for us.

    Last but not least, let’s work hard to improve our communication skills.

    Regards,
    Simin

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Dear Simin
      My heartfelt apologies for this delayed reply. Thank you for spending the time to read my post and I hope you have learnt more about me. Yes, definitely let us all work harder!

      Regards
      Jo

      Like

  4. Hey Jo, glad to know you enjoyed your short stint at Fairmont even though the job was tough. I think using every experience as a learning opportunity, no matter how long or short, is a great attitude to have. Keeping an open mind to all sorts of opinions is rare in this society where individualism is rife. I believe with enough practice and self-confidence, you will be able to improve your voice projection during public speaking.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Dear Seet
      Sorry for this late reply. The job was certainly tough but worthwhile as guests appreciate my efforts. Thanks for reading my post. Enjoy your day!

      Regards
      Jo

      Like

  5. Hey Jo,

    It’s been really nice to read this article of yours! It seems like we both share similar sentiments regarding formal presentations and could make improvements in time to come! I too face problems when attempting such feats and perhaps we could work on our flaws together.

    I am sure your working experiences have brought you insights and contributed to your positive mindset! To hear of your passion in the hospitality industry is simply energizing! Please do continue to hold on to it!

    Regards,

    Kieman

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Hi Kieman!
      I apologise for the delay in getting back to you. Thank you for reading my post and I am glad that you enjoyed reading it. Also, thank you for the encouragement!

      Regards
      Jo

      Like

  6. Dear Jo,

    Thank you for the great sharing 🙂 I like how you are an active and patient listener and I would like to learn this from you! I believe with more practice, you will be able to present confidently in front of large groups. Let’s work towards achieving our goals for better communication and writing!

    Nonetheless, I thought that the statements below could have written in a better form;

    1) Some of my strengths when it comes to communication include being an active listener, able to make sufficient eye contact with my audience and speak in a friendly tone. I am open-minded and respect others perspectives even when they do not align with my point of views.
    -> Proposed statement: My communication strengths include being an active listener, having sufficient eye contact with my audience and speaking in a friendly tone. Although perspectives vary across people from all walks of life, I am always open to the different view points and would show respect when they sharing.

    Great job on your write up! See you around in school 🙂

    Cheers,
    Adora

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Dearest Adora
      Apologies for the delay in getting back to you. You are the only one to correct my mistakes in the post and I certainly appreciate this! 😀 Thank you for letting me learn and yes, hope to see you more often in school too!

      Regards
      Jo

      Liked by 1 person

  7. Dear Jo,

    This is a concise yet detailed and informative letter. I appreciate the way you connect your educational background and overall skills development with your work experiences. You also reflect well on your communication needs and strengths. And you’ve received lots of great feedback!

    There are still a few areas that need review (not mentioned by Adora!):

    1. singular/plural confusion
    — with my point of views
    — to use slangs

    2. phrasing
    — …I had never worked in a hotel priorly. (word form/spelling) >>> ?
    — … However, I tend to speak quite softly during formal presentations hence I need to work harder to overcome my nervousness. (run on sentence) >>> ?

    These are all fairly minor issues. Most importantly, you have communicated on the requested topic areas in a sincere fashion. I look forward to learning more from you this term.

    Best wishes,

    Brad

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Dear Brad
      Thank you so much for reading my post. You are the second person to correct my mistakes and I really appreciate this 🙂

      Regarding the phrasing, I may revise as follow:
      I had never worked in a hotel priorly. >>> Prior to my internship, I have never worked in a hotel before.

      However, for the second correction regarding my soft voice, I do not understand what you meant by ‘run on sentence’. I will be grateful if you could elaborate on this?

      Regards
      Qian Hui

      Like

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out /  Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

w

Connecting to %s